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Lamia Lawless
Lamia Lawless
Posts: 604

9/17/2017
Some of my favorite writing comes from when you set zail.

Then London is behind you, and the Unterzee stretches broad and dark before you, black as an Aztec mirror, stippled with moonish light. Back in the foggy embrace of London, it's easy to forget just how big the Neath really is.


I never get tired of the image of smooth, mirrory black water no matter how many times I read it.

Much of the text in dreams is lovely, too. The Fire Sermon in particular. And a dream about a stable has this most memorable description of a dream horse:

They dazzle the eye. The purest white coat, and strange, spinning red eyes. Strange even by horse standards.


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Lamia Lawless
Lamia Lawless
Posts: 604

9/20/2017
Catherine Raymond wrote:
FL has much writing that is memorable, and the posters above have alluded to my favorite segments. But beautiful? It's hard to think of most of it as beautiful. (There *is* a part of the Eaten story that lies Beyond the Gate, but because it lies Beyond the Gate I cannot quote it.)

The most beautiful thing I know of in FL is the sunrise image that is used as the "Visions from the Surface" icon.


Fallen London has so many aspects that it would be hard for me to just pick one to describe it. There's the comedic, and then the comedic itself comes in different types. Sometimes it's dry wit, sometimes it's very tongue-in-cheek, and sometimes it's just plain silly. Sometimes the Gothic and the horror aspects range from befanged hats and bat motifs to things like the truly disturbing origins of red honey. But if I were to do my best to describe the Neath to someone unfamiliar with the game, I would say the Neath is a Dark Place.

It's a place where you're forcibly reminded that human ideas of fairness and goodness and loveliness have very little relevance to the order of the universe. Even in a place hidden from the gaze of the stars, when things break the rules, they rarely break them in a way that's in human favor. And so, when the Neath manages to be beautiful, I get the feeling it's its own strange kind of beauty, independent of what humans might prefer. That's what makes the setting unique. A smooth, black subterranean sea and stars that could be jewels or insects, or jeweled insects. A rainbow of colors that don't exist, like cosmogone and violant. The idea that even beings of unimaginable greatness and alien psychological makeup can be heartbroken, and that even though humanity may be of very little importance to those beings, we have that much in common with them. That perhaps our own frequently doomed endeavors to love and be loved might matter on some cosmic scale in spite of our assigned roles in the stories. That's the beauty of the Neath. Since those things stand out to me the most I can see why the emphasis on beautiful imagery might be strange, because it's also the same game that gave us the Pre-Emptive Guinea Pig and the Ratskin Suit. ("Your 'umble ratskin is hard-wearin', it's waterproof, and it's remarkable warm. And silk comes out of a worm's arse.") I think it's a mark of the versatility of the writers that makes both co-exist so naturally in the same universe.

I like your example of the sunrise image, because I myself tend think of it as a visual representation of the other kind of beauty in Fallen London, the kind which is shaped by human sentiment: Wistfulness.

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John Moose
John Moose
Posts: 276

9/21/2017
I find some of the descriptions of Is-Not really touching.

"She will rise from the zee and the ice like dawn. She will be garlanded with red and decked with gold."

"If you burn, you burn like a candle. If you die, you die like dawn."

I think the sharp contrast with the darkness and grittiness of Neath makes it easier to truly appreciate the splendour of Parabola.
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Lady Sapho Byron
Lady Sapho Byron
Posts: 770

9/18/2017
I think this one from getting married is touching:

[spoiler]You step outside with your new spouse. A hesitant Neath-wind brushes against you. The night is deep. Overhead, false-stars glow in the velvet gloom. There's no sun to announce it, but a new day is coming. It'll be different to the ones before.[/spoiler]

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Teaspoon
Teaspoon
Posts: 866

9/17/2017
*coughs*.

Do you recall how they came to that place...

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Passionario
Passionario
Posts: 777

9/18/2017
Not just the finales. "Red as yes" wins my personal award for 'maximum beauty in fewest words'.
Optimatum wrote:
This other thread seems somewhat relevant.

Despite the claims of Mahogany Hall's earworm composers, 'memorable' and 'beautiful' are not always synonyms.
edited by Passionario on 9/18/2017

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gronostaj
gronostaj
Posts: 403

9/18/2017
I'm usually not about all these...- romances and loves and feelings, but this line from the ending to Once-Dashing (Always-Dashing) Smuggler's romance keeps haunting me. Something about the way it's written, like it's meant to be breathtaking.
He mentions that secrets are inscribed upon the interior of tomb-colonist bandages, and says you are welcome to his.

All the secrets that you find pale in comparison to his face.

And speaking of love, all the answers to Millicent's question about it are also quite striking.

From the Fidgeting Writer's of Cat, Seprent and Red Bird;
At first they watch, then they lean close - like the surface of the moon! - and begin to eat. They start with your fingers, then suck on your heart. They eat and eat, every bit of you until there's nothing left but them.

And from Sunless Sea, though it's not Fallen London, but still, by failbetter. And incredibly descriptive in its laconic-ness.
The wind screams, like a god cut in half.

honestly, if I wanted to put down all my favourite quotes here, this post would get really long. A testament to failbetter's writers' incredible and enviable skills.

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Passionario
Passionario
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10/18/2017
Bitty wrote:
I always thought this line from when you're on a slow boat passing a dark beach on a silent river when you have Nemesis is real chilling

"They must have passed this way, on this boat. You could go on and join them, in the silent houses of the dead. But then how would you avenge them?"


Speaking of Nemesis, this line sums up that entire Ambition quite nicely:

"Revenge is important. What you are becoming is not."

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Catherine Raymond
Catherine Raymond
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9/23/2017
John Moose wrote:
I find some of the descriptions of Is-Not really touching.

"She will rise from the zee and the ice like dawn. She will be garlanded with red and decked with gold."

"If you burn, you burn like a candle. If you die, you die like dawn."

I think the sharp contrast with the darkness and grittiness of Neath makes it easier to truly appreciate the splendour of Parabola.

Dear Lord. I missed those sentences. Now I think they will be forever in my mind: "If you burn, you burn like a candle. If you die, you die like dawn."

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Bitty
Bitty
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10/17/2017
I always thought this line from when you're on a slow boat passing a dark beach on a silent river when you have Nemesis is real chilling

"They must have passed this way, on this boat. You could go on and join them, in the silent houses of the dead. But then how would you avenge them?"
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oblivion
oblivion
Posts: 12

9/21/2017
The SMENdings are really good, but not to be quoted here, so...

Something else from SMEN, from the 'Pervert your studies' storylet:

"Each word that you forget from that Last Alphabet opens a commensurate space in your brain. Untrace sigils. Unmake the promise. Unwrite yourself."

And the success of the storylet:
[spoiler]"He came up (you do not write) to offer a little. They hooked him (you do not declare) like a fish. Their knives (you do not suggest) were dark and sharp as the Mountain's daughter. He screamed then (you have not recorded) and they opened their mouths, red and white and rich with treasure. O but the feast was too short: sweet as the stars, bitter as the sun, all with that old redolence (which you might well footnote) of a certain ammonia. He breathed (your ink does not flow) until his vents were stifled with tears. If he had a soul (you might conjecture; you do not conjecture) it would have skipped and sizzled like rich blood on a griddle."[/spoiler]
edited by oblivion on 9/21/2017

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Magrok
Magrok
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10/1/2017
Whether this is beautiful may depend, but it has perhaps resonated with me more than anything else in the game as of yet: from the Renown:Bohemians 8-14 action.

[spoiler]And thus with a kiss
It's harder to romanticise Romeo and Juliet when Romeo has gurgled and foamed to death, and Juliet's blood has sprayed into the audience.(...)[/spoiler]

This truly made the world real for me.

The Neath is a unique place in many, many aspects, one of the most glaring being the inability to permanently die (at least in Fallen London). And, well... of course art would make use of that. Art makes use of everything, it's what it does, to comment on or add meaning to the world, create something where there was nothing and stir emotion in its audience. Morbid and shocking, yes, but also an opportunity to add more immersion to one's work.

It's one of those little details that you'd never think of in passing but makes perfect sense once presented. And it is something I will cherish.

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BlabberingMat
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Posts: 385

9/17/2017
The one that left the most impression on me is writing in Fate Locked "12:15 from Moloch Street", if you choose to visit Hell.

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Emain Ablach
Emain Ablach
Posts: 348

9/17/2017
Mr Eaten's endings are veeery beautiful. The imagesdepicted are splendid.

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Catherine Raymond
Catherine Raymond
Posts: 2518

9/20/2017
Lamia Lawless wrote:
Catherine Raymond wrote:
FL has much writing that is memorable, and the posters above have alluded to my favorite segments. But beautiful? It's hard to think of most of it as beautiful. (There *is* a part of the Eaten story that lies Beyond the Gate, but because it lies Beyond the Gate I cannot quote it.)

The most beautiful thing I know of in FL is the sunrise image that is used as the "Visions from the Surface" icon.


Fallen London has so many aspects that it would be hard for me to just pick one to describe it. There's the comedic, and then the comedic itself comes in different types. Sometimes it's dry wit, sometimes it's very tongue-in-cheek, and sometimes it's just plain silly. Sometimes the Gothic and the horror aspects range from befanged hats and bat motifs to things like the truly disturbing origins of red honey. But if I were to do my best to describe the Neath to someone unfamiliar with the game, I would say the Neath is a Dark Place.

It's a place where you're forcibly reminded that human ideas of fairness and goodness and loveliness have very little relevance to the order of the universe. Even in a place hidden from the gaze of the stars, when things break the rules, they rarely break them in a way that's in human favor. And so, when the Neath manages to be beautiful, I get the feeling it's its own strange kind of beauty, independent of what humans might prefer. That's what makes the setting unique. A smooth, black subterranean sea and stars that could be jewels or insects, or jeweled insects. A rainbow of colors that don't exist, like cosmogone and violant. The idea that even beings of unimaginable greatness and alien psychological makeup can be heartbroken, and that even though humanity may be of very little importance to those beings, we have that much in common with them. That perhaps our own frequently doomed endeavors to love and be loved might matter on some cosmic scale in spite of our assigned roles in the stories. That's the beauty of the Neath. Since those things stand out to me the most I can see why the emphasis on beautiful imagery might be strange, because it's also the same game that gave us the Pre-Emptive Guinea Pig and the Ratskin Suit. ("Your 'umble ratskin is hard-wearin', it's waterproof, and it's remarkable warm. And silk comes out of a worm's arse.") I think it's a mark of the versatility of the writers that makes both co-exist so naturally in the same universe.

I like your example of the sunrise image, because I myself tend think of it as a visual representation of the other kind of beauty in Fallen London, the kind which is shaped by human sentiment: Wistfulness.


Well said, Lamia; very well said. You have made my see FL in a different light by your words, and that doesn't happen often to me. Thank you.

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earthbourn
earthbourn
Posts: 149

9/24/2017
The text beyond the Gate is nice, but I especially like the text leading up to the Gate:

[spoiler]The Flukes know your name, but they do not call it...Here is a black glass mountain, shuddering with lights...Your ship cries out to it, and it cries back...Your ship will founder here, and you will stride carelessly from its wreck, snowflakes unmelting on your skin. (Yes. Yes.)[/spoiler]

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A Dimness
A Dimness
Posts: 613

10/2/2017
Wordlessly you hand them over, and with two quick paces she places them in the fire. When she returns to sit opposite you her hands are shaking. The two of you talk, honestly. It goes no further than that. There are no confessions of feeling. You are never less than a room apart. But something else connects you: a moment of vulnerability - the firmest currency of the Game - that you cast away.
edited by A Dimness on 10/2/2017

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Brin
Brin
Posts: 53

10/18/2017
I think one of the key Monster-Hunter unique options deserves mention, for all of the wonder that below the waves conjures up. It's a whole separate world you embrace, the hunter slowly becoming the monster. Much like John here is saying, and other snippets that have been quoted here in the thread.

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"Moments in darkness"
False-star light on the water, in the moment before your dive shatters the surface –
The seal, lithe as an otter, harsh-skinned as a shark –
The pounding embrace of threshing waters –
The Movement and the Act, which cannot be performed above the water or in the sight of living men –
The ecstatic roar of the Seal –
The blood, spilling warm into the icy water, so you can draw it into your mouth. The Hunter's sacrament –
You rise from the water with your harpoon hooked neatly through the Seal's neck-plates as it follows meekly in your wake. Your bo'sun sees the predator's secrets in your eyes, and lowers his gaze.

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I need to play the Eaten storyline to know why everyone is so enthusiastic about it. It terrifies me there are actually multiple outcomes, with how long in theory it takes to get to those outcomes.

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John Moose
John Moose
Posts: 276

10/18/2017
The boat and Pass's line remind me of this:

"You remember the hollow voice you heard in your dreams. The gnawing hunger in your belly. The way the darkness seemed populated with tiny movements. The sense you had that your bones were outgrowing your skin... perhaps you shouldn't go back. It's more peaceful here."

I think, in general, FL has so many stories about becoming something monstrous and crossing lines you'll never be able to cross back, that moments of clarity and hesitation in the madness make for some very, very heavy words. My character getting an outsider perspective on their Seeking for a moment really showed me what I was doing to him, and what kind of hellish fever dream his life had become.
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Lamia Lawless
Lamia Lawless
Posts: 604

9/25/2017
earthbourn wrote:
The text beyond the Gate is nice, but I especially like the text leading up to the Gate:

[snipped by L.L.]


This is incredible. I'm glad you shared this.

Several people mentioned Seeking finales. I have yet to do any serious Seeking, but this line from Sackmas day 9: At Your Window continues to haunt me.

[spoiler]
A trace of sadness, like the frost which silvers the night [...] I was Mr. Candles. I will not be again.
[/spoiler]

It wrenched a little heartbreak out of me. Without my permission!
edited by Lamia Lawless on 9/25/2017

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Anchovies
Anchovies
Posts: 421

10/1/2017
Magrok wrote:
This truly made the world real for me.

The Neath is a unique place in many, many aspects, one of the most glaring being the inability to permanently die (at least in Fallen London). And, well... of course art would make use of that.
You would LOVE this month's Exceptional Story, "The Stone Guest". It's about film-making in the Neath.

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Lamia Lawless
Lamia Lawless
Posts: 604

9/21/2017
John Moose wrote:
I find some of the descriptions of Is-Not really touching.

"She will rise from the zee and the ice like dawn. She will be garlanded with red and decked with gold."

"If you burn, you burn like a candle. If you die, you die like dawn."

I think the sharp contrast with the darkness and grittiness of Neath makes it easier to truly appreciate the splendour of Parabola.


Ooh... Agreed.

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Catherine Raymond
Catherine Raymond
Posts: 2518

9/18/2017
FL has much writing that is memorable, and the posters above have alluded to my favorite segments. But beautiful? It's hard to think of most of it as beautiful. (There *is* a part of the Eaten story that lies Beyond the Gate, but because it lies Beyond the Gate I cannot quote it.)

The most beautiful thing I know of in FL is the sunrise image that is used as the "Visions from the Surface" icon.

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Addis Rook
Addis Rook
Posts: 125

9/17/2017
I have to second that the writing behind the Mr. Eaten finales are very beautiful. It's some of the finest writing in the game.
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MidnightVoyager
MidnightVoyager
Posts: 858

9/17/2017
Personally, I'm in love with the text for succeeding in gaining a Sanguine Ribbon.

http://fallenlondon.storynexus.com/Profile/MidnightVoyager?fromEchoId=12160716

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Optimatum
Optimatum
Posts: 3666

9/18/2017
This other thread seems somewhat relevant.

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Urthdigger
Urthdigger
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9/18/2017
There's one bit of writing that stuck with me for a while, though I'm afraid I can't find an echo for it. It was when you had tea with the Duchess after discovering her ties to the brutal Cantigaster Venom. Something about how you're frightened she might be trying to kill you, but politely drink your tea anyway. It is very good tea.

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Optimatum
Optimatum
Posts: 3666

9/18/2017
Passionario wrote:
Optimatum wrote:
This other thread seems somewhat relevant.

Despite the claims of Mahogany Hall's earworm composers, 'memorable' and 'beautiful' are not always synonyms.

I agree. But some of the writing will, inevitably, be both memorable and beautiful. Thus the relevancy.
edited by Optimatum on 9/18/2017

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Achanei
Achanei
Posts: 63

9/18/2017
Hunter's Keep. The mystery, the quiet serenity with that subtle danger just under the surface... I really enjoyed staying there, talking to the strange trio and trying to piece their story together.

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Lamia Lawless
Lamia Lawless
Posts: 604

9/20/2017
Catherine Raymond wrote:

Well said, Lamia; very well said. You have made my see FL in a different light by your words, and that doesn't happen often to me. Thank you.


Thank you, too. I'm glad that I was able to convey my passion for the writing effectively! I was a little worried I had gotten long-winded.

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Sam Stephens
Sam Stephens
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10/2/2017
I can't recall any specific lines or phrases, but I loved the way that the theme of childhood vs. adulthood was repeated many times in HOJOTOHO! I don't want to say anything since I'll spoil everything by talking too much, but it is easily my favorite ES of the ones I've played.

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The Amiable Muckraker
The Amiable Muckraker
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10/18/2017
From "The Awful Temptation of Money."
"Trade is the basis of civilisation, from the marbles the urchins swap in their games to the deals that shape an Empire. If only they were all honest. You have a lead on some rare coins."
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